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Too many historical buildings are in danger and destroyed in many countries. What are the main reason and how to protect them?

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Modernization, an obvious process of recent time, is the root cause of
destruction
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the destruction
 of many historical buildings.
This
 essay will highlight some crucial reason for
this
 phenomenon and suggest some ways to protect these buildings. The main reason behind
this
 demolition of historic buildings is to meet the need of the burgeoning population. Shy-scrappers are the part of the
cities
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city
, and they are needed today as lands are becoming scarce. Some old buildings are serving no purpose today. They are neither safe to live nor attracting tourists. On the top of
that they
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that, they
 occupy a huge space. Even renovation is not sufficient to make it
last
 long because of
it’s
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 age-old weak structure.
As a result
, these may crumble/collapse anytime and cause injury to nearby
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
.
Thus
, these buildings are destroyed to meet the need and ensure safety of people. As these buildings are
invaluable wealth
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an invaluable wealth
 of a
county
a politically organized body of people under a single government
country
, the government should come forward to take bold steps to protect these buildings. They should list all old buildings and identify which bears cultural and historical values. These buildings can be renovated and used as a tourist place which will benefit the county by earning foreign currency. Government should
also
 identify those buildings that need no renovation and can be used as different purpose.
For example
, some historic the
then
 palaces in Bangladesh are now being used as a university
resident
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residence
 hall for the student. Even some buildings are used as a government office. By these ways, these buildings can be preserved, and people can reap the benefit of it. In conclusion, destroying ancient historic buildings are advantageous to satisfy the need and establish modern cities.
However
, the government should preserve important historic buildings which can attract tourist and can be used as different purpose of a country.

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