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In some countries, it can be difficult for people over the age of 50 to get good jobs, despite their experience. What do you think are the causes of this problem, and what measures could be taken to solve it?

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Problem
Suggestion
The problem
 of getting jobs with increasing age is
bitter tough
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bitter, tough
 in some
contries
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
counties
centres
 and few are
thinkg
any movable possession (especially articles of clothing)
things
 to prevent
this
Linking Words
 situation as well. Almost all
contries
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
counties
centres
 who are facing
this
Linking Words
 situation are from western
contries
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
. There are so many reasons behind the problem
rises
come into existence; take on form or shape
arises
, one of them is with increasing age, they loose the grip on the
work
Use synonyms
 they are doing and most of the times they are physically not fit. Due to
this
Linking Words
 they are
unalbe
(usually followed by 'to') not having the necessary means or skill or know-how
unable
 to
work
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on
Suggestion
in
 the workplace. In some cases, with
increasing
Suggestion
an increasing work experience
the increasing work experience
work
Use synonyms
 experience they do not learn new things or do not adopt the change and
hence
Linking Words
 they become out of the market reach. Though they are well skilled and experienced, they are not getting paid well enough just because of the age. The companies are thinking that
the older
Suggestion
older
 people can not
work
Use synonyms
 harder than the younger one, but they forget the experience they
oaught
expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something
ought
 with them is the priceless. It's been seen that in worse condition of the employer, aged employees
work
Use synonyms
 harder to get rid of the problems with their experience. In my
openion
a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty
opinion
, the companies have to
work
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 on enabling their workforce with
latest
Suggestion
the latest
 skills and for that they should arrange classroom training, professional training or in-house training from the trained professionals. So they are
albe
(usually followed by 'to') having the necessary means or skill or know-how or authority to do something
able
 to stand in the market and can
albe
(usually followed by 'to') having the necessary means or skill or know-how or authority to do something
able
 to find the right job in the market.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • age discrimination
  • bias
  • stereotype
  • tech-savvy
  • adaptable
  • retraining
  • upskilling
  • employment regulations
  • job options
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