Prison is the common way in most countries to solve the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people a better education. Do you agree or disagree?

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Over the past decades, the rampant

crime

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has been provoked

considerably

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considerable

Although

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imprisonment

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are commonly believed

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is commonly believed

to be

most appropriate

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more appropriate

effort to restrict the phenomenon in many countries, education has been concerned to be more effective. In my opinion, despite the potential advantages of

equiping

the act of equiping with weapons in preparation for war

equipping

better education, the benefits of prison sentence outweigh the other. On the one hand, it is widely adopted that lack of

eduaction

the activities of educating or instructing; activities that impart knowledge or skill

education

usually directly leads to potential

crime

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. Many may argue that the more people provided moral norms and knowledge, the less

rate

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the rate

of committing

crime

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argument could be true to some extent. In fact, being brought up with ethics could form a person to follow the rules which limits the chance of violating the laws.

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, the willing to commit the law needs to be nipped in the bud and the educational approach could not ensure the lower rate of

recommitment

the act of getting recruits; enlisting people for the army (or for a job or a cause etc.)

recruitment

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, the crimes usually take the re-education unconsciously, likely to offence and back to the old illegal life.

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, it is essential to take into account that

imprisonment

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has been preferred for its undeniable,

unrejectable

not capable of being foretold

unpredictable

benefits. The

imprisonment

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is the penalty that not only keep the criminals to harm the

society but

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society, but

also

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give

opportunity

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an opportunity

the opportunity

of remorse as a humanitarian punishment.

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, the fear of losing freedom and spending life in prison is an effective means of determent which is a burden to potential criminals to recommit the

crime

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, towards the dangerous criminals or in special

circumstances

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circumstances, such

such

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as deeply violating the laws,

imprisonment

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has always been prioritized in many countries. Taking all above mentioned fact into account, it is clear that the benefits of re-educational approach bring positive effects on criminal;

however

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this

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method is eclipsed by the advantages of

imprisonment

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People’s life expectancy in the 21st century has been rising on an unprecedented scale. As a result, policymakers are now considering extending the working age for old people. Prolonged life is, on the one hand, a welcome change for many individuals, yet I believe this is completely not a good idea for old people to continue to work due to several reasons related to their deteriorated work performance and capability to adapt to new technologies. Breakthroughs in medicine and heightened awareness of nutrition are the two key factors leading to longevity. For example, nanotechnology, with tiny robots being injected into patients’ body and mending all their damaged organs, are believed to the one of the secrets to obliterate any currently incurable diseases such as cancer. Additionally, people nowadays are better aware of the importance of a good diet, and such wise consumption can ensure good health and consequently extended age. However, extending people’s working age can be a catastrophe to both senior citizens and companies. The majority of people at the age of 65 or over, especially in developing countries, are unable to maintain the same degree of performance as their younger counterparts. This would eventually give rise to many unwanted repercussions that affect the company’s overall profits and the personal life of the aged workers as well. Also, the fast-paced life requires quick adaption and adjustments to new technology, and this is something that the elderly may never be on par with the younger ones. It is not an overstatement to say that it is a torture to work in a place where you are both physically and technologically inferior to your younger co-workers. In conclusion, my firm conviction is that old people should not be involved in work any longer than their designated retirement age now. If the need for workforce is urgent, old people can, to a certain extent, work as consultants or mentors rather than the main labor force. 30 minutes – 323 words – computer-deliveredFri Aug 02 2019

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

296 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

tackles root causes
preventative approach
critical thinking
decision-making skills
recidivism rates
equipping
socio-economic benefits
underlying factors
poverty
ignorance
lack of opportunities
rehabilitation
ineffective
higher rates of re-offending

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Prison is the common way in most countries to solve the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people a better education. Do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place. What is your opinion about this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Many people believe that companies and individuals should pay to clean up the environment in proportion to the amount of pollution they have produced. To what extent to you agree or disagree?

Some people think universities should provide knowledge and skills related to a future career; others think the true function of a university is to give access to knowledge for its own sake. What is your opinion of the main function of university?