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People in their adolescent

age

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do lots of shopping just to pass their time rather than doing some productive tasks. I believe, they should be motivated to do fruitful activities which in turn provide a good benefit to themselves.

To begin

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with, doing varieties of activities for pastime has become commonplace for different

age

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group

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but especially

teenagers are

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teenagers, are

found to be inclined

toward

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shopping which may be due to

myriads

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the myriads

of reasons,

such

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as at

first

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they are so much influenced by advertising; that are developed to captivate people’s attention,

as a result

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, younger

are involving

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are involved

in shopping more often.

Second

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, adolescents are not conscious in comparison to old

age

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people in saving

money

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due to which if they get

money

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, they will either go for entertainment or do buy things without a

second

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thought.

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, my sister’s daughter, who is running at 16’s, has a habit of doing lots of shopping: she has more than 40 dolls and 20 pairs of sandals in her home. While

shopping habit

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the shopping habit

is considerably

increasing

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increased

in these days, I think parents and elder people should encourage young people to do productive activities. The reason is extravagant habit of

young

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the young

could get reflected in the

elder

advanced in years; ('aged' is pronounced as two syllables)

older

age

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too;

this

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not only affects them but

also

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their parents.

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Furthermore being

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Furthermore, being

prodigal might cost them much in coming days,

for instance

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, one might need

money

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to pursue the desire like studying in

aboard

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a board

which requires lots of

money

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so, if youngster contributes their time in learning activities, it can help to some extent to create a more comfortable life in

future

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the future

. In conclusion, shopping is necessary, but recklessly spending

money

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on it is definitely not good so,

elder

advanced in years; ('aged' is pronounced as two syllables)

older

people should motivate their younger to be more productive and control their spending habits.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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299 words

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Include an introduction and conclusion

Some children spend a long time each day on their smartphones. Why is this? Is this a positive or negative development?

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