Air pollution is one of the largest problems facing the world today. What are its causes and what measures can be proposed to solve this problem?

People in their adolescent
age
do lots of shopping just to pass their time rather than doing some productive tasks. I believe, they should be motivated to do fruitful activities which in turn provide a good benefit to themselves.  
To begin
with, doing varieties of activities for pastime has become commonplace for different
age
group
,
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,
but especially
teenagers are
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teenagers, are
found to be inclined
toward
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to
shopping which may be due to
myriads
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the myriads
of reasons,
such
as at
first
they are so much influenced by advertising; that are developed to captivate people’s attention,
as a result
, younger
are involving
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are involved
in shopping more often.
Second
, adolescents are not conscious in comparison to old
age
people in saving
money
due to which if they get
money
, they will either go for entertainment or do buy things without a
second
thought.
For instance
, my sister’s daughter, who is running at 16’s, has a habit of doing lots of shopping: she has more than 40 dolls and 20 pairs of sandals in her home.   While
shopping habit
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the shopping habit
is considerably
increasing
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increased
in these days, I think parents and elder people should encourage young people to do productive activities. The reason is extravagant habit of
young
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the young
could get reflected in the
elder
advanced in years; ('aged' is pronounced as two syllables)
older
age
too;
this
not only affects them but
also
their parents.
Furthermore being
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Furthermore, being
prodigal might cost them much in coming days,
for instance
, one might need
money
to pursue the desire like studying in
aboard
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a board
which requires lots of
money
so, if youngster contributes their time in learning activities, it can help to some extent to create a more comfortable life in
future
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the future
. In conclusion, shopping is necessary, but recklessly spending
money
on it is definitely not good so,
elder
advanced in years; ('aged' is pronounced as two syllables)
older
people should motivate their younger to be more productive and control their spending habits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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