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Some scientists believe intelligent life forms may exist on other planets and some want to send messages to space to contact these life forms. But other scientists believe it is a bad idea and it could be dangerous. Discuss both ideas and give your own opinion.

In the modern world, it is undeniable that scientific advancements have increased human curiosity about the possibility of intelligent
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 beyond Earth.
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 some scientists support sending messages into
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 to contact extraterrestrial beings, others believe that
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 action is risky and potentially dangerous. In
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 essay, an attempt will be made to examine both perspectives before presenting my own opinion. Those who support sending messages to
space
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 provide some reasons to justify their view. One of the most obvious benefits is that contacting intelligent
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 forms could greatly expand human knowledge. To illustrate, communication with advanced
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civilisations
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 might help scientists gain insights into new technologies, medical breakthroughs, or alternative energy sources.
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, if another
civilization
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civilisation
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 has solved major global problems
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 as climate change, humans could learn valuable lessons from them.
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, supporters argue that making contact could confirm that humanity is not alone in the universe, which would be one of the greatest scientific discoveries in history. Those who believe
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 idea is dangerous
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 have some points that should not be overlooked. One major reason is that humans have no way of knowing whether extraterrestrial beings would be friendly or hostile. To clarify, sending our location into
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 could expose Earth to potential threats.
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, a technologically superior
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 might exploit Earth’s resources or pose risks to human survival.
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, critics argue that humanity should first focus on solving its own global issues,
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 as poverty and conflict, before attempting to communicate with unknown
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 forms. To recapitulate, it is evident that some support sending messages to
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 because of the potential scientific benefits,
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 others fear serious risks and unpredictable consequences. Having considered both sides thoroughly, I have personally come to believe that contacting extraterrestrial
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 at
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 stage is unwise. Until humans gain a deeper understanding of
space
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 and ensure global stability, caution should be the guiding principle.

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language use
Some long sentences make ideas hard to read; try to use shorter lines.
task response
Keep your view clear in the start and finish with a strong, plain opinion.
structure
Each paragraph should start with a topic idea and end with a quick link to the next idea.
examples
Add clear, exact examples that fit your point.
editing
Check for small grammar slips that can break the flow.
structure
The essay keeps a clear plan: intro, two body parts, and a close.
cohesion
You link ideas well with easy join words.
content
Reasoning is easy to follow and ideas are explained.
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