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some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible.others believe that some information is too valuable to be shared freely. discuss both views and give your own opinion

#people #information
It is thought by some people it is beneficial to share more
information
 as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world.
However
,
Accept space
,
the others believe that some
information
are
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is
 too valuable to be shared freely. The
information
 plays
vital role
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a vital role
 in the society. It is a key factor for the development and enhancing the technology.The exchanging of the Knowledge generously for enhancing higher welfare standards. For an instant, consider an alternate method of shopping the briefing
this
 alternate helps others in many ways like saving time and funds. These
helps
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help
 in formation of better interaction between buyer and sellers, The facts are generally
involves
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involved
 in the arduous efforts by the person or persons. These
includes
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include
 involvement of the time, money and strenuous efforts. They
also involves
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also involve
are also involved
 in the ascetic practices. To
illustrate take
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illustrate, take
 on software
developers
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development
. The employees
undergoes
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undergo
 various puzzles and obstacles.They follow
purtan
something determined in relation to something that includes it
portion
button
 in the work to produce an outstanding results. The should move out of
box
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the box
 to make flexible and reliable outcomes. There developed program are too valuable they would prefer to be awarded by
increment
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an increment
the increment
 in salary or in other forms like
bonus
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a bonus
. To recapitulate
,
Accept space
,
the
information
 sharing to beneficial as per some people.
whereas
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Whereas
 others believe data is precious to be given candidly.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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