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the graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992. write a report for university lecturer describing the information shown below

the graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992. write a report for university lecturer describing the information shown below
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The given line graph depicts the information about
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the usage
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 of
television
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 and
radio
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 by UK
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people's
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people
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 throughout
whole
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 day during October - December in
1992
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the 1992
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 year. The audiences
given
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 in percentage. At a fleeting glance,
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 at 1;00 AM about 5%
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people
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of people
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 watched
television
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 and
listen
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radio
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 which remained
same
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the same
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 upto 6:00 AM but after 6, it showed acceleration and reached
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25% at 8:00 AM where
radio
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 showed slightly incline. At 1:00 PM
radio
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 viewers increased by nearly 10% where
television
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 views declined by 10% and both stopped at 15%. Moving
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 towards afternoon, after 1:00 PM,
radio
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 listen by most population and after small drop it inclined by steep value and at 6:00 PM
radio
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 listen by above 40%
people
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 of UK and passed 8:00 PM many
people
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 stopped listening
radio
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 and value reached to about 20% at 11:00 PM where
television
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 percentage showed wave nature and value become same from which it stared.
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, it is vivid that in morning time most of persons prefer to watched
television
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 but afternoon till night they listen
radio
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words television, radio, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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