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Spending Money On Space Exploration Programmes Is A Waste Of Money

According to some people, the government should not spend
money
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 on
space
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 exploration. I agree with
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 view. In my opinion, there are other areas that need public spending.
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,
space
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 exploration is not crucial for the development of a country. Of course, there are some benefits
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of
 investing in
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 research. It helps us to learn more about the universe we are a part of.
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, there is a possibility that some
space
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 missions may find life on other planets. We may
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 be able to find other inhabitable planets. Since, population growth is leading to a resource crunch on
planet
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 earth, finding another
planet
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 that can sustain life is in the larger interest of the whole humanity.
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, there is no guarantee that we will find another
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 that we can colonize. It is a mere possibility and it may take hundreds or thousands of years before we actually manage to achieve it.
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, spending public
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 on
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 projects is unlikely to offer much in return at the moment. What’s more, there are several other pressing needs on earth that need immediate resolution.
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, millions of people still do not have access to potable water or education. Even today, thousands of people die in war and conflicts almost every day. It is foolish to spend
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 on
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 programmes before addressing these issues. Actually, making our
planet
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 more livable is much better than finding another
planet
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 to live in. In conclusion,
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 outer
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 exploration projects help us to learn more about the universe, these projects are not crucial for the development of a country.
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, public
money
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 should be spent on more pressing issues like healthcare and education because they directly impact the public.

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