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The table below gives information about a restaurant’s average sales in three different branches in 2016.

The table below gives information about a restaurant’s average sales in three different branches in 2016.
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The table depicts the average sales of three different branches of a restaurant in Vancouver. These 3 restaurants are located
at
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 Georgia
Street
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,
Dunsmuir
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street
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 and
Drake
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Street
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 in Vancouver. The table gives information about the
number
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 of
transactions
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 and
it’s
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their
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 values,
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number
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the number
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 of eat-in and Take-Away
transactions
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 and the most popular
item
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 at each branch. It is evident from the table that the restaurant at
Dunsmuir
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 had the highest
number
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 of
transactions
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 and
the
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transaction
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 value. It had 854
transactions
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 with each
transaction
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 valued at 10.69 dollars.
While
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 the restaurant at
Dunsmuir
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 had 750
transactions
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 which
are
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 more than
the
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Drake
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Street’s
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 390
the
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Dunsmuir
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’s 5.61 dollars per
transaction
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 was less than
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Drake
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Street’s
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transaction
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 value which was 9.02 dollars. The difference in the
number
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 of
transactions
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 via Eat-in and Take-Away at each Branch
were
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was
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 almost similar. Among all the provided restaurants the one
in
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 Georgia
Street
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 and
Drake
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Street
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 had the highest and lowest
number
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 of
transactions
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 in both Eat-in and Take-Away. In all the 3 branches the most popular
item
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 was a
Chicken
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item
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. Georgia
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Street’s
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 popular
item
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 was the
Chicken
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 Burger
while
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Dunsmuir
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Street
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 and
Drake
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Street’s
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 famous
item
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 was
Chicken
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 Wings and
Chicken
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 Pasta respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 90%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words street, dunsmuir, drake, number, transactions, item, transaction, street’s, chicken with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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