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The table below gives information about a restaurant’s average sales in three different branches in 2016.

The table below gives information about a restaurant’s average sales in three different branches in 2016.
#information #restaurant’s #sales #three #branches
The table depicts the average sales of three different branches of a restaurant in Vancouver. These 3 restaurants are located
at
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 Georgia
Street
,
Dunsmuir
street
 and
Drake
Street
 in Vancouver. The table gives information about the
number
 of
transactions
 and
it’s
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their
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 values,
number
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the number
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 of eat-in and Take-Away
transactions
 and the most popular
item
 at each branch. It is evident from the table that the restaurant at
Dunsmuir
 had the highest
number
 of
transactions
 and
the
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apply
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transaction
 value. It had 854
transactions
 with each
transaction
 valued at 10.69 dollars.
While
 the restaurant at
Dunsmuir
 had 750
transactions
 which
are
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is
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 more than
the
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Drake
Street’s
 390
the
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apply
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Dunsmuir
’s 5.61 dollars per
transaction
 was less than
the
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Drake
Street’s
transaction
 value which was 9.02 dollars. The difference in the
number
 of
transactions
 via Eat-in and Take-Away at each Branch
were
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was
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 almost similar. Among all the provided restaurants the one
in
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 Georgia
Street
 and
Drake
Street
 had the highest and lowest
number
 of
transactions
 in both Eat-in and Take-Away. In all the 3 branches the most popular
item
 was a
Chicken
item
. Georgia
Street’s
 popular
item
 was the
Chicken
 Burger
while
Dunsmuir
Street
 and
Drake
Street’s
 famous
item
 was
Chicken
 Wings and
Chicken
 Pasta respectively.
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 90%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words street, dunsmuir, drake, number, transactions, item, transaction, street’s, chicken with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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