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Some people spend their time in one place. Others move a number of times throughout their lives, looking for a better job, house, community or even better climate. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

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Introduction
Some
people
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 are content to spend their entire lives in the place where they were born,
while
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 others relocate a number of times in search of better employment, improved housing, a stronger sense of community, or even a more comfortable climate. In my opinion, relocating is the better choice, as moving to another country can offer a cooler climate, better infrastructure, and stronger educational opportunities.
Body paragraph 1
Admittedly, some
people
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 feel homesick even if their home country offers fewer opportunities, because they miss their family, familiar shops, and traditions. It can affect their focus on their studies and leave them feeling hopeless and anxious, which can lead to lower grades or depression. Living abroad
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 means facing everyday tasks alone, from opening a bank account to understanding local paperwork, with no family nearby to help.
Body paragraph 2
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, homesickness is usually a phase that most
people
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 get through within a few weeks, and the feeling fades. In my view, the difficulty is worth it in order to find a better life and a more open-minded community that will not judge them for being different. It is better to live somewhere that accepts differences than to spend a lifetime pretending to be someone else. Moving abroad
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 exposes
people
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 to different ways of thinking, which broadens their perspective in a way that staying in one place rarely does.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
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 leaving home brings homesickness and difficulty, I believe relocating is worthwhile. The chance to live somewhere more accepting, with better opportunities, outweighs the temporary discomfort of settling in.

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task response
Discuss both sides more fully. The essay explains why moving can be good, but the reasons for staying are mostly about the problems of moving. Add clear good points of staying, such as close family help, old friends, and a strong link with local life.
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Keep all points close to the question. The question includes jobs, homes, community, and weather. Your answer talks well about community and life abroad, but says little about jobs, homes, or weather after the first paragraph.
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Give one clear, real-looking example. For example, a person may move for work, earn more money, and then find a safer home for their family. This would make your main idea stronger.
coherence and cohesion
Your four-paragraph plan is clear: start, one side, your view, and end. To make it even clearer, begin the second body paragraph with a line that shows it is the other side, such as: “On the other hand, moving can bring important gains.”
coherence and cohesion
Some ideas need a closer link. The first body paragraph starts with people who stay at home, then moves to the hard parts of living abroad. Explain that these hard parts are why many people choose not to move.
coherence and cohesion
Use a few more simple link words to show cause and result: “because”, “so”, “as a result”, and “for this reason”. This will help the reader follow each step of your ideas.
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Your opinion is clear from the start and stays the same until the end. You clearly say that moving is the better choice.
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You give useful reasons for moving, such as better life chances, a more open community, and new ways of thinking.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear start and a clear ending. The ending returns to your main view and brings the essay to a natural close.
coherence and cohesion
Paragraphs are easy to follow, and words such as “Admittedly”, “However”, and “In conclusion” help show the direction of the essay.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • stability
  • community
  • economic opportunities
  • relocation
  • personal growth
  • diverse experiences
  • culture
  • adaptability
  • quality of life
  • recreational facilities
  • disruptive
  • emotional costs
  • profound
  • sense of belonging
  • globalized economy
  • professional network
  • job prospects
  • challenges
  • exposure
  • well-being
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