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Some people believe that they should keep all the money they have earned and should not pay tax to the state. Do you agree or disagree with the above notion? You should write at least 250 words.

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A group of people think that residents should keep all their earnings and should not have an obligation in paying taxes to the
government
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. I personally disagree with the statement as taxes are useful for the residents and the nation themselves, and the following essay will discuss it in details.
To begin
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 with, it is a fact that taxes are used by the
government
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for
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in
 developing its nations. Taxes are allocated for various kinds of essential matters.
Firstly
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, they are used for expanding and maintaining public transportation facilities,
such
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 expanding roads and highways, and replacing old public transportation units.
Secondly
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, taxes are utilised for providing decent medical services and basic educations for their residents. And
last
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 but not least, taxes are
also
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 used for funding military services, which is important for maintaining the political stability of a nation. And
then
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, people should
also
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 notice that
taxes
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tax
 that they have paid, will
also
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 be beneficial for themselves sooner or later. Some of the funds that have been collected by tax authorities
are used
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use
for
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of
 retirement funds. It means that in the end people will enjoy and benefit some personal facilities from the
government
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, which are funded from taxes.
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Therefore people
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Therefore, people
 should not keep their earnings to themselves and they should comply in paying their tax duties and obligations. In conclusion, I do not agree if we should keep all our income and not pay any taxes to the
government
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, as taxes are beneficial for the development of the people and the nation themselves.
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