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Nowadays, internet and television has given ordinary people a chance to become famous. Is this a positive or negative development? Give your opinion and relevant examples

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through
Suggestion
Through
 the web and television world. Some common
person
 comes to the limelight through negative opinion on society or the other issues. I believe, it is a good positive sign, we get to know many hidden talents in our country with the help of internet and Television. To embark upon, when an ordinary
person
 places an opinion about any issue, other people get offended and make him famous by defaming. Everyone's having a different opinion about one particular thing, when someone comment on any issue, it gets viral due to
it
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 questions other's belief system, that
person
 gets trolled on the internet or in news channels eventually become famous overnight.
For example
, In India, ten years ago, a student who was doing her master wrote a letter to government officials about the removal of the reservation system of Indian society as job's cannot be allotted to only few caste people,
this
 letter created an outcry in social media making her famous but in a negative way, people trolled on twitter for many days.
This
 affected her personal life a lot.
However
, there are some positive sides of
this
 internet and television. These are the only platform to show unique skills to the whole world. There are so many common people made their career by displaying their unique talent on social media and through television shows.
For example
, Famous singer Amala Paul got overnight fame through one of the singing reality show and now she is the most popular singer in India. In conclusion, with the help of media and on web, common
person
 get famous for the wrong reason which can ruin their life, but at the same time, there are many ordinary people who made their mark in
this
 society by their hidden talent.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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