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Some people think that schools should involve students in school management. Do you agree or disagree with this idea?

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Time is changing and so is the educational methods. Nowadays, pupils are being imparted various forms of knowledge
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in
 schools.
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, some criteria which are of
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 makers. Students should be carefully taught how to take personal and social responsibilities in order to improve their personalities as well as their capabilities. Some thinkers in
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 sector, opine that getting students enlisted in
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 administration and daily activities, not only makes them well-prepared for the future to be able of taking more essential responsibilities, but
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 facilitates
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 management for staffs as well as principals.
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 notion due to the following reasons. Today, children, without a shadow of a doubt, are more capable of
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 making and logical thinking compared with their counterparts in the past. Their abilities of thinking can be utilized by
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school
school’s
 headmasters in order to improve conditions, so that students’
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-making skills
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 will be fortified
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.
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,
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 issue assists schools to overcome their difficulties much easily.
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, if students’ opinion be taken into consideration, their commitment to schools will be
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refrain from harming
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. Apart from making
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, there are some other activities
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 as cleaning, doing maintenance of the
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 facilities, etc.
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In
 which students can be involved. Not only does
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 co-operation ease
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 management for the staffs and its directors, but
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 provides students with skills which are so practical and useful for their future. Having
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 idea in the mind, doing these tasks by students adds to their level of confidence, inasmuch as they will achieve to self-autonomy which is of
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the greatest
greater
greatest
 importance for their future lives. To recapitulate, based on the aforementioned compelling grounds, getting pupils involved in
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 activities either mentally in the area of
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 making or physically in daily tasks, not only provides schools’ managers and directors with comfort, but
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 augments students’ skills in different aspects. It is hoped that
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 useful action will have been taken into practice by all educational
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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