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How can governments encourage people to take more exercise?

#governments #people #exercise
It is generally accepted that
people
 today
take
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 insufficient
exercise
.
This
, combined with a poor diet, can lead to ill health and a poor quality of life. In view of
this
, it has been suggested that governments should act to encourage more
exercise
. I shall consider two of the proposed methods. Probably the most important action governments could take would be to introduce an education programme
into
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 all schools.
In addition
 to publicising the benefits of
exercise
,
this
 would make
exercise
 a compulsory part of the school curriculum and get young
people
 used to following an
exercise
 regime. In my view,
however
, for
this
 to be truly successful, there should be a corresponding programme aimed at adults. If parents took part in an
exercise
 programme put on by the school, they would be supporting what their children were being taught. It has been suggested that if
exercise
 facilities were free, there would be an increased public take-up. In theory,
this
 seems an excellent way of encouraging adults to
exercise
, but in practice I am doubtful. It is based on the assumption that
exercise
 depends on money,
whereas
 in fact walking and cycling, two very effective ways of keeping fit, are free and can be fitted conveniently into most
people
's daily
routine
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routines
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.
Therefore
, in my opinion, providing expensive extra facilities is unnecessary and would be a misuse of public money. In view of the above arguments, I believe governments should introduce education programmes aimed at
people
 of all ages because
this
 is the most cost-effective means of achieving the desired goal.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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