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Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production and preservation outweighs the advantages?

#dangers #chemicals #food #production #preservation
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Owing to the fact that a lot of people purchase their
food
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 items from supermarkets and stores, it is required that most of these items have
preservatives
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 in them to achieve a longer shelf life.
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 the use of chemicals in the production and preservation of
food
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 has its
draw backs
the quality of being a hindrance
drawbacks
, in my opinion, it
also
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 has a lot of benefits which we will see in the course of
this
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 essay. Admittedly, chemicals used in
food
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 processing, have been said to have some
draw backs
the quality of being a hindrance
drawbacks
.
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, research has showed that 70 percent of
preservatives
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 used are carcinogenic and
constanct
unvarying in nature
constant
 consumption may trigger cancer in the organs of individuals. More
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, it has been said that
addictives
someone who is so ardently devoted to something that it resembles an addiction
addicts
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 may cause allergic reactions to people.
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, without chemicals in
food
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 production, many
food
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 items would decay before getting to the final consumer.
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instance vegetables
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instance, vegetables
 will wither
on
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with
 time, potatoes and yam will get eaten by ants and termites and beans consumed by weevils.
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, public health agencies carefully regulate the
preservatives
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 used in
food
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 processing, to avoid health dangers to the public.
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, very few people have the chance to eat only what they can grow themselves, due to the fact that exposure has made a lot individuals shift focus from farming to white collar jobs.
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, the need for
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export
 foods which most of the time have
preservatives
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. In conclusion, despite the fact that chemicals used in
food
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 processing and
preservatives
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 have its
draw backs
the quality of being a hindrance
drawbacks
, I believe
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 practice has more benefits since it is well monitored by government agencies to avoid risks to the public's health.
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