Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now one big traffic jam. how true do you think this statement is? what measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars

Currently, when the overpopulation becomes more and more awful while the living level is updated
day
Suggestion
daily
by
day which
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day, which
results to a big global problem named "
traffic
jam
". Someone said that due to the rapid increase of cars, many
city
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cities
in the world are now "big
traffic
jam
". In my opinion,
this
statement is
true according
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true, according
to my personal observation.
First
of all, when living standard was enhanced, people have more and more
abilibties
the quality of being able to perform; a quality that permits or facilitates achievement or accomplishment
abilities
to purchase
car
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a car
because of both daily need and need of
respectation
. The speed of purchasing was too fast That the government
hardly keep
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hardly keeps
up in repairing and extending the
infracstructure especially
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infrastructure, especially
infrastructure especially
the
street
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street, then
then
it becomes easy for
traffic
to take place and become worse.
Secondly
, about the car ownership attitude, many people do not obey to
traffic
rules, daily news
always announce
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always announces
about a lot of
situation
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situations
that cars
runs
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run
in
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with
motobike
small motorcycle with a low frame and small wheels and elevated handlebars
motorbike
land which is very small that happens
traffic
jam
.
Nowadays global government
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The nowadays global government
has brought so many
measure
Suggestion
measures
aimed to discourage people from using cars and
persude
win approval or support for
persuade
persuaded
them to use public transportation
instead
such
as making
poster
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posters
a poster
about
enviroment
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
pollution or using
public vehicle
Suggestion
public vehicles
for saving budget,... Fortunately, those measures carry out effectively and cars using number
has gradually declined
Suggestion
have gradually declined
. In the conclusion, over the past
thirdty
being ten more than twenty
thirty
thirsty
year car ownership has grown up so rapidly that do make cities in the world become a giant
traffic
jam
. Anyway, thanks to the government effort, that problem may become no more risk in
the the
definite article
the
future.

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