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Some people think that governments should spend as much money as possible on developing or buying computer technology. Other people disagree and think that this money should be spent on more basic needs. Which one of these opinions do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

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The line graph depicts the rate of young British, who prefer eating vegetarian food spanning over the past 50 year period. Obviously, we can clearly see that in 1960, young people did not have quality. And
then
, in the
next
 20 years, the number of modern vegetarians rose sharply in 1980 and reached its peak (more than 15%). After a gradual decline in the
next
 10 years, the rate of abandonment of British teenagers from meat fluctuated between 1990 and 2000, around 6%. At 1995,
this
 ratio reached its lowest point, slightly below 5%. Since
then
, the number of younger who have changed their habits and become vegetarians has been increasing moderately until now. These percentages are expected to tend to be slightly flat and
then
 grow. In general, teen vegetarians tend to be discovered in 1960 and were very popular in 1980. Since
then
, the number of British vegetarians has fallen and cannot be restored to the previous maximum, but it is likely to rise.
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