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overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle this problem

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Overpopulation is the biggest
problem
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 that many metropolitan around the world are facing. It causes huge problems to
urban area
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urban areas
an urban area
, both in physical and social aspects so it should to have mitigation to solve
this
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problem
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 which I will suggest in
this
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 essay below.
Firstly
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, the numerous of people flows only in the capital
city
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, causing a quick derogation to the
city
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's physical
environtment
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
 aspect,
such
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 as a traffic congestion led the air pollution, poor waste management.
Moreover
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, the numerous people' needs are higher than
a
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an
 existing
city
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 services, which causing a lack of
neccessary
absolutely essential
necessary
 services, especially in
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city's infrastructure
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the city's infrastructure
.
Secondly
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, social aspects
also
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 have many serious
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problem
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problems
, but the
obviously
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obvious
 issue is inequality in our society. Even the main
city
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 provides a lot of chances to people, whether best salary
,
Accept space
,
job, and a good quality of life, but for
special people group
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the special people group
special people groups
a special people group
, which including disabilities, elderly, and women, they are ignored
from
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by
 government and
also
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 cut their chance to have
better quality
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a better quality
 of life they should be.
Finally
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, We should consider about overpopulation
effecting
arousing affect
affecting
 both physical and social
problem
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,
Therefore
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,
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 should aware and create policy to limit the number of migrants from
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 area to urban.
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, the
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 has to prepare enough infrastructure and services for coping
this
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problem
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 in the long term.
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, they
should to invest
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should invest
 more
bussiness
a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it
business
district which
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district, which
 creates new jobs in
rural area
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rural areas
 because it can
attarct
direct toward itself or oneself by means of some psychological power or physical attributes
attract
 people to stay and find their job in their hometown.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • strain on infrastructure
  • public services
  • overcrowded
  • inadequate healthcare services
  • pressure on educational institutions
  • environmental impact
  • increased pollution
  • waste management
  • destruction of green spaces
  • natural habitats
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