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Should governments make decisions about people's lifestyle or should people make their own decisions

#governments #decisions #people #lifestyle
Decision making has a vital role in everybody's
life
.
Therefore
,
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a school of thought
argues that,it
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, argues that it
 is the
responsiblity
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibility
 of higher authorities to take decisions about one's way of
life
.
while
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While
 other school of thought believes that
,
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,
it is the sole responsibility of
indivitual
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the individual
individual
.
Hence
this
 essay
analaysis
someone who is skilled at analyzing data
analysts
 whose responsibility
is making
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are making
 decision regarding
life
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
style
 On the one hand
,
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,
it is argued by many people that authorities should take decisions regarding
life
style
 because it aids the well being of a society.
In other words
,
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,
in
this
 modern world people are facing a lot of problems in their
life
 like health problems and lack of nutritional food.
Hence
,
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,
if government makes decisions about
people
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people, life
life
style
,
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,
it can hamper
this issues
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this issue
these issues
.
For instance
,
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,
many countries people should pay a lion share of
there
of them or themselves
their
 income as tax.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
government
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the government
canuse
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can use
this
 amount for the basic need of a nation.
Also
 have
strignent
demanding strict attention to rules and procedures
stringent
 rules for family planning and housing.
there
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There
 for it ensure the well being of a nation
On the other hand
,
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,
it is said by many people that decision making about
life
style
 is right of a person because
then
 only he can achieve his goals.To be more specific
,
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,
diperent
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
 people have
different aim
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different aims
a different aim
 and tastes.
As a
result people
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result, people
 will always choose a
dicision
the act of making up your mind about something
decision
division
discussion
accourding
(followed by 'to') in agreement with or accordant with
according
 to their interest and it ensure them to achieve their task.
For example
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,
most of
artist
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the artist
are succesful because of they followed their
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is successful because they followed their
is successful because of they followed their
are successful because of they followed their
 own decisions To conclude
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,
after analysing both views it is clear that
goverment
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the government
government
 and
indvitual
 have
equel
having the same quantity, value, or measure as another
equal
 importance in
this
 scenario.Because
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
dcisions
the act of making up your mind about something
decisions
 are for
wellbeing
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the wellbeing
well being
 of
nation whereas
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the nation, whereas
the nation whereas
a nation whereas
nations whereas
indivitual
a human being
individual
dicision
the act of making up your mind about something
decision
division
decisions
 helps to achieve goals

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