Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

professional
Suggestion
Professional
sports athletes are well known and can earn millions of dollars
annualy
without missing a year
annually
. Some people believe that these
sportsman
Suggestion
sportsmen
desreve
be worthy or deserving
deserve
to have a
luxurius
displaying luxury and furnishing gratification to the senses
luxurious
life and a high paid salary due to their outstanding abilities, while others believe there is no justification for the high income they earn, and should earn the same salary as other professions. The main
reason
why professional athletes,
such
as Ronnaldo or Messi, should earn substantial amount of money, lies in the fact that not only they are the best in the world at what they do, but
also
have a demanding lifestyle like no other profession. An athlete is completely devoted to his sport, and everything in his daily life,
such
as sleeping, eating and reading is sacrificed in order to become better in his field. To illustrate, Michael
felps
lightly throw to see which side comes up
flips
, the most rewarded
swimmer
Suggestion
swimmers
in history, eat 30,000 calories a day in order to maintain his daily exercise program.
Also
, Michael Jordan, when played professional basketball, used to sleep frequently in the stadium in order to have an extra morning practice. And still, many people, including myself, believe there is no
reason
for a soccer player to earn thousands of pounds a week, and that the current situation is not fair. Surgeons,
for example
, have spent years in operating
rooms polishing
Accept comma addition
rooms, polishing
their surgical abilities, just as a professional
cyclers
a person who rides a bicycle
cyclist
have spent on the course. The main difference
however
, is that a
surgeons
Suggestion
surgeon's
surgeon
job
carry
Suggestion
carries
much more
responsibilty
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibility
responsibly
responsibilities
and risk and,
from
Suggestion
for
that
reason
, should be rewarded
similarly
.
Furthermore
, unlike sportsmen, medical doctors or university
proffesors
the highest ranking position for a university academic
professors
professor
, as an example, contribute to our society much more than a
proffesional
engaged in a profession or engaging in as a profession or means of livelihood
professional
runner and
this
, in my eyes, should be admired and compensated
accordingly
. To conclude, many famous athletes earn
alot
Suggestion
a lot
of money, mostly due to their outstanding ability and devotion, Despite that, I do not think they are any different from other demanding professions which contribute more to our community and, from that
reason
,
ahould
expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something
should
be paid
equaly
to the same degree (often followed by 'as')
equally
.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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