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People living in big cities face several problems. What are these problems? Should governments encourage people to move to smaller town?

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Owing to the trend of moving to major cities to improve economical status, is increasing at an alarming rate. It leads to traffic congestion and shortage of residential areas. The
government
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 should motivate and facilitate people to shift to regional towns. Due to modernized way of living, everyone prefers to live in urban areas.
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 trend has led to significant issues,
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 as, traffic congestion. Increase in population of mega cities, demands more vehicles, ultimately, flow of private and public transport on the road increases, leading to
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 issues.
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, lack of residential areas is
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 a major concern. Despite advancement in infrastructure has led to multistory towers, there are still constant issues appearing regarding accommodation. As an illustration, in Karachi, a metropolitan city of Pakistan, it is hard to find an apartment or rent a house at low fares because, Karachi can no longer
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 accommodate immigrants. People living in urban areas encounter problems that have a profound impact on their daily life. It is the utmost responsibility of the
government
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 to encourage people to move to regional towns by facilitating them in every aspect of life.
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, the Punjab
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 has allocated teachers and has updated schools with modern equipment, in order to decrease shifting to cities. Major steps by the
government
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 to motivate people to stay in the rural areas will curb important issues appearing in mega cities. To conclude, people living in large cities face many problems,
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 as traffic issues and lack of facilities of accommodation. Encouragement BY THE
GOVERNMENT
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 MUST BE ENSURED TO MOTIVATE PEOPLE, FOR SHIFTING INTO REGIONAL TOWNS.
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