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Space exploration costs taxpayers an exorbitant amount of money each year. What are the advantages and disadvantage of spending money on space exploration?

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Each year Taxpayers spend a lot of money to supply the
space
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exploration
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 indirectly. In my opinion a crucial advantage is the advantages which come from accomplishment of new technologies, and other industries following them, but as a disadvantage perspective, the exerted incomes of that cannot be an observable thing for taxpayers. Yearly, taxpayers spend a lot of money, which supply the
space
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exploration
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. The
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exploration
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consider
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considers
 as an action which have not impact on people daily routine performance, and people would like to find tangible reaction from
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the amount
 of tax that spend.
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, when the government
make
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makes
 a highway,
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 fact is considered by people to have corresponding with the
annually
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annual
 tax, but some development in a country cannot have a sensation
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 as
space
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exploration
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. In a year, taxpayers devote a cost of
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exploration
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. As a great outcome of
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 activity, should say investigation in high technologies being
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exploration
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, will
followed
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follow
 by other advancement which comes into other national or international industries, and
this
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 matter leads to new evolution in economic and health.
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, new technologies that can explore the depth of the
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, now are using to predict the weather. In Conclusion,
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 it is thought by some that paying the tax for
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exploration
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 has not
benefit
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benefited
 in their life, but I believe that it would be more helpful
to
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for
 development of national and international industries even make more convenient in our life.
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