It is expected in the near future that there will be a higher proportion of old people compared to younger population in some countries. 🔸Is it a positive or negative development? Give your opinion and examples.

It is widely believed that people’s
age
would be a problem for some countries in
near future
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the near future
as the older
population
will outnumber the younger one. I personally think that
this
would have numerous negative impacts on the society and I will explain why in
this
essay.
To begin
with, a country’s economy is hugely dependent to young people as they are ambitious and determined to achieve goals and make noticeable changes not only in their personal life, but
also
in the society which they live in so as to be well-known and counted on in their professional field. Examples can be seen in entrepreneurs’ average
age
and how they have positively affected the job market and
consequently
brought
enormous amount
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an enormous amount
enormous amounts
of money in their own country’s economic cycle.
Furthermore
, technology and people’s
age
have a close-knit relationship as it is them who develop almost every technical device and are extraordinarily good at solving any problem
by
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with
technology.
However
,
as a result
of the increase in a
population
’s
age
, the whole country might fall behind others in terms of technical improvements which is of great importance in
this
modern era.
For instance
, most of under-developed countries are those which have lost their young members due to the inability of providing them with the amenities they need.
Finally
, as people grow older, they require constant medical care which in turn leaves the government with no choice, but to allocate more budget to the
healthcare
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health care
system. A significant amount of money that can and must be spent on everyone’s welfare is wasted on an issue which nobody can guarantee has a happy ending. While it may be correct that having older people in each community brings along wisdom and more carefully-made decisions. It still appears to be the case,
however
, that any country would significantly benefit from a younger
population
. To conclude, an old
population
will hinder the economy, slow down technology’s development and waste a country’s money on less important issues whereas, a younger one can be a great help in developing the society in every aspect possible.
This
is not to say that, a country can’t benefit from the older
population
as well, but it appears to be the case very
frequently
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frequent
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • aging population
  • proportion
  • mentorship
  • strain
  • public healthcare systems
  • pension schemes
  • workforce
  • economic growth
  • automation
  • consumption patterns
  • intergenerational solidarity
  • sustainable living
  • environmental conservation
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