It is expected in the near future that there will be a higher proportion of old people compared to younger population in some countries. 🔸Is it a positive or negative development? Give your opinion and examples.

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The world

population

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is increasing day by day, but

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increasing the number of people is not evenly distributed. Some countries gripped by overpopulation and some counties

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suffer from negative

population

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growth rate. Of

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negative rate is a significant issue that should be viewed and

analyzed

examined carefully and methodically; broken down for consideration of constituent parts

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from multiple perspectives. It is crystal clear, the elderly people have valuable working experience and they can share their hands-on experiences with

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the younger

younger

generation.

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mix of generations can have a positive

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effect

and impact on

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economic

growth.

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the making decision process will be easier and the outcomes will be more reliable. As time goes on, the old people lose their working abilities and need more care and attention and

government

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should provide them with free social and recreational facilities and they should have given

generous retirement pension

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a generous retirement pension

that they can comfortably live

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their pensions. So the

government

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must allocate more budget to old people who devote their whole life for country. As it is known to all, the country with

negative rate

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a negative rate

population

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will face a wide range of problems because the workforce will be

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decline while the budget that

government

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should spend for elderly age will be on

increase

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the increase

. So, one of the solution

can be encourage

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can encourage

the general public to have

large extended family

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large extended families

a large extended family

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nuclear family

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the nuclear family

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the Netherlands

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. Or some countries can develop their own immigration policies and adopt young workforce from other countries like Canada. In conclusion, I believe that elderly people are capital of country and we should hold them in a great respect, but the countries that suffer from

high proportion

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a high proportion

of old

population

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need a great attention to overcome

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problem and

government

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plays a vital role in

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occasion along with awareness among the citizens.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

aging population
proportion
mentorship
strain
public healthcare systems
pension schemes
workforce
economic growth
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consumption patterns
intergenerational solidarity
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It is expected in the near future that there will be a higher proportion of old people compared to younger population in some countries. 🔸Is it a positive or negative development? Give your opinion and examples.

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