It is expected in the near future that there will be a higher proportion of old people compared to younger population in some countries. 🔸Is it a positive or negative development? Give your opinion and examples.

The world
population
is increasing day by day, but
this
increasing the number of people is not evenly distributed. Some countries gripped by overpopulation and some counties
on the other hand
suffer from negative
population
growth rate. Of
course
Accept comma addition
course, this
this
negative rate is a significant issue that should be viewed and
analyzed
examined carefully and methodically; broken down for consideration of constituent parts
analysed
from multiple perspectives. It is crystal clear, the elderly people have valuable working experience and they can share their hands-on experiences with
young
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the younger
younger
generation.
This
mix of generations can have a positive
effects
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effect
and impact on
economy
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economic
growth.
In addition
the making decision process will be easier and the outcomes will be more reliable. As time goes on, the old people lose their working abilities and need more care and attention and
government
should provide them with free social and recreational facilities and they should have given
generous retirement pension
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a generous retirement pension
that they can comfortably live
in
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on
their pensions. So the
government
must allocate more budget to old people who devote their whole life for country. As it is known to all, the country with
negative rate
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a negative rate
of
population
will face a wide range of problems because the workforce will be
on
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in
decline while the budget that
government
should spend for elderly age will be on
increase
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the increase
. So, one of the solution
can be encourage
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can encourage
the general public to have
large extended family
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large extended families
a large extended family
instead
of
nuclear family
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the nuclear family
like
Nethelands
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the Netherlands
Netherlands
. Or some countries can develop their own immigration policies and adopt young workforce from other countries like Canada. In conclusion, I believe that elderly people are capital of country and we should hold them in a great respect, but the countries that suffer from
high proportion
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a high proportion
of old
population
need a great attention to overcome
this
problem and
government
plays a vital role in
this
occasion along with awareness among the citizens.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • aging population
  • proportion
  • mentorship
  • strain
  • public healthcare systems
  • pension schemes
  • workforce
  • economic growth
  • automation
  • consumption patterns
  • intergenerational solidarity
  • sustainable living
  • environmental conservation
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