It is expected in the near future that there will be a higher proportion of old people compared to younger population in some countries. 🔸Is it a positive or negative development? Give your opinion and examples.

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The world

population

is increasing day by day, but

this

increasing the number of people is not evenly distributed. Some countries gripped by overpopulation and some counties

on the other hand

suffer from negative

population

growth rate. Of

course

Accept comma addition

course, this

this

negative rate is a significant issue that should be viewed and

analyzed

examined carefully and methodically; broken down for consideration of constituent parts

analysed

from multiple perspectives. It is crystal clear, the elderly people have valuable working experience and they can share their hands-on experiences with

young

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the younger

younger

generation.

This

mix of generations can have a positive

effects

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effect

and impact on

economy

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economic

growth.

In addition

the making decision process will be easier and the outcomes will be more reliable. As time goes on, the old people lose their working abilities and need more care and attention and

government

should provide them with free social and recreational facilities and they should have given

generous retirement pension

Suggestion

a generous retirement pension

that they can comfortably live

Suggestion

their pensions. So the

government

must allocate more budget to old people who devote their whole life for country. As it is known to all, the country with

negative rate

Suggestion

a negative rate

population

will face a wide range of problems because the workforce will be

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decline while the budget that

government

should spend for elderly age will be on

increase

Suggestion

the increase

. So, one of the solution

can be encourage

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can encourage

the general public to have

large extended family

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large extended families

a large extended family

instead

nuclear family

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the nuclear family

Nethelands

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the Netherlands

Netherlands

. Or some countries can develop their own immigration policies and adopt young workforce from other countries like Canada. In conclusion, I believe that elderly people are capital of country and we should hold them in a great respect, but the countries that suffer from

high proportion

Suggestion

a high proportion

of old

population

need a great attention to overcome

this

problem and

government

plays a vital role in

this

occasion along with awareness among the citizens.

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Topic Vocabulary:

aging population
proportion
mentorship
strain
public healthcare systems
pension schemes
workforce
economic growth
automation
consumption patterns
intergenerational solidarity
sustainable living
environmental conservation

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