It is expected in the near future that there will be a higher proportion of old people compared to younger population in some countries. 🔸Is it a positive or negative development?

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that in the near future, old people will constitute the majority of the

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in some countries and there will be a lower percentage of young people compared to older

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. I strongly believe that

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is a negative development and it will have many detrimental effects on

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and people. Some people argue that in a

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with

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adults, authorities should spend more budget on education, so if there will be less young people in the country, less grant will be devoted to education and they believe that

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development will be beneficial for

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economy

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the economy

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, I think

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the older population

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bring

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brings

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, in a country with many old people, government should subsidize many

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as retirement houses and health insurance companies. It is obvious that younger people are more creative and innovative than elders, so they can run many local businesses which will boost the

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. In a country with

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, in

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situation there are many available job positions because workforces are just retired or ineffective. Companies may accept employees from other countries to fulfil their need for young workforce.

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, a large proportion of

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will be migrants.

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these young workforces from other countries are beneficial for

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, by increasing the number of migrants, the ancient culture of the nationality will be gradually forgotten. To sum up, I believe that more people in old ages

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a detrimental development with many negative effects on the country’s

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. I think governments should introduce long term policies to avoid disruptions in the balance of the

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aging population
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mentorship
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public healthcare systems
pension schemes
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economic growth
automation
consumption patterns
intergenerational solidarity
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It is expected in the near future that there will be a higher proportion of old people compared to younger population in some countries. 🔸Is it a positive or negative development?

Your opinion

The use of social media, e.g. Facebook and Twitter, is replacing face-to-face contact for many people in everyday life. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Wealthy nations should assist poorer countries with humanitarian relief during natural disasters

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In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work . some people regard this as completely wrong , while others consider it valuable work experience , important for learning and taking responsibility . What are your opinion on this ?

Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs (for example working on charity, teaching sport to younger people) To what extent do you agree or disagree?