It is expected in the near future that there will be a higher proportion of old people compared to younger population in some countries. 🔸Is it a positive or negative development?

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In the modern world, people tend to have less kids than they used to, which will cause a skew towards higher ages in the population in coming years. While it may be a sign of positive developments, I believe the change itself is a negative phenomenon. From what I can understand, the fact that the population in some countries
are getting
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is getting
older demonstrates two main changes.
Firstly
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, reduce in the number of births, and
secondly
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, the life expectancy increase.
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the
first
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can be interpreted in various ways, the latter can definitely be taken as a symptom of positive evolution.
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, several measures have been taken to make sure that not every disease can lead to death. The development in medical area alone shows how helpful these improvements are.
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, I would argue that dealing with an aged population is sure not a preferred choice for any government.
Higher proportion
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A higher proportion
of old people simply means on one hand, fewer work force and less contribution to GDP, and
on the other hand
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, raising
pension
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pensions
and health insurance costs. To put it in a nutshell, countries will earn less and will have to spend more. Not mentioning the geopolitical risks of
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a change.
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, just imagine a country involved in a war, which already lacks young soldiers willing to fight in the field and at the same time should hold on to its industries and keep the economy up. In conclusion,
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it is beneficial to try and extend the life expectancy, I think aged populations can cause many problems and today’s trend in
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area doesn’t look promising.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • aging population
  • proportion
  • mentorship
  • strain
  • public healthcare systems
  • pension schemes
  • workforce
  • economic growth
  • automation
  • consumption patterns
  • intergenerational solidarity
  • sustainable living
  • environmental conservation
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