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Science will soon make people live up to 100 or even 200 years. Some believe this is a good thing while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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It is frequently believed that advancements in science will eventually lead people on the earth to have a lifespan of about a century or even more than that. While some people agree with
this
, there are others who strongly disagree with it. In my opinion,
this
 increase in the lifespan of humans will aggravate the existing
world
 problems
further
. On the one hand, some believe that people should live for a 100 years or even more than that as it will help them to stay with their loved ones for an extended period of time
.
Accept space
.
 As there will be fewer deaths, the
world
 will be a better place to live in with no sorrows and sadness over the death of the near ones.
Moreover
, the life span of
intelligent
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intelligence
 and genius people can be extended which will help the
world
 get more knowledgeable people and they can offer their guidance through their experiences of life
to
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for
 the upcoming generations.
However
, the aforementioned benefits are negligible when we consider the downsides of living forever. To start with, after people reach the age of 75 or 80 they have hardly anything left to do or experience.
This
 will make their lives monotonous.
In addition
,
this
 trend will lead to population explosion and will be detrimental to already existing global problems like food shortage, pollution and global warming, water crisis, accommodation issues and traffic congestion
to mention
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mention
 some. The
world
 resources will be depleted at a much faster rate with more people simultaneously consuming them. Another aspect to
this
 is that with
more proportion
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a more proportion
 of population in elderly group the government will need to invest more for
social benefits
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the social benefits
 of
old
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older
 people and
this
 will affect the economy of the nation. To conclude, people may vary in their opinion, but I think that science should not go against the law of nature and extend the lifespan of humans as it will worsen the economy and environment of the
world
.
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