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some people work for the same organisation all their working life others think that it is better to work for different organisation

#people #work #organisation #life
The bar chart illustrates the proportions of academic
staff
 percentages in faculties by gender in 2012. There was a major gender inequality in some fields engineering is completely dominated by male and in education, domination was done by the female. Considerably almost 85% of engineering
staff
 were male and
rest
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the rest
 were female, whereas in education three-quarters of the
staff
 were female and just 25% of male and in another field like in medicine gender equality is relatively equal. Both male and female shared almost equal proportions in science and business with nearly 65% of male and 35% of female. In arts more than half of the
staff
 were female and the male just accounted for 45% and in law male proportions was 20% more than that of women by 40%.
Although
 the faculty of engineering and science, law, and business were male dominant in 2012,
however almost
Accept comma addition
however, almost
 more than half female was dominant in education and predominant in the arts.
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