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The bar chart illustrates the proportions of academic
staff
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percentages in faculties by gender in 2012. There was a major gender inequality in some fields engineering is completely dominated by male and in education, domination was done by the female. Considerably almost 85% of engineering
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were male and
rest
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the rest
were female, whereas in education three-quarters of the
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were female and just 25% of male and in another field like in medicine gender equality is relatively equal. Both male and female shared almost equal proportions in science and business with nearly 65% of male and 35% of female. In arts more than half of the
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were female and the male just accounted for 45% and in law male proportions was 20% more than that of women by 40%.
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the faculty of engineering and science, law, and business were male dominant in 2012,
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however almost
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however, almost
more than half female was dominant in education and predominant in the arts.
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