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In some countries, it is becoming increasingly common for people to follow a vegetarian diet. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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A large number of people in some nations are opting to have a vegetarian
food
.
This
 essay argues that the advantages of adopting
such
diet
 outweigh the disadvantages because
vegatarian
eater of fruits and grains and nuts; someone who eats no meat or fish or (often) any animal products
vegetarian
food
 is cheap and harmless. The average cost of buying fruits and vegetables is much lower as compared to meat.
That is
 to say, people belonging to different
socio-economic
involving social as well as economic factors
socioeconomic
 status are able to afford and consume a vegetarian
diet
. It not only helps them to reduce their
spendings but
Suggestion
spending, but
spending but
also
 makes it possible to save some money.
For example
, a recent survey in London revealed that some families were able to save more than 20% of their annual income after becoming vegetarians because the cost of
food
 was low. Another reason why a
vegatarian
eater of fruits and grains and nuts; someone who eats no meat or fish or (often) any animal products
vegetarian
diet
 is beneficial is that it contains less fats and more nutrients.
In other words
, meat contains high levels of fats and cholesterol, which is harmful for our well-being. By choosing to become a vegetarian, people could save themselves and acquire all essential vitamins and other nutrients present in fruits and vegetables.
For instance
, a recent study conducted by New York University revealed that vegetarians were at low risk of developing lifestyle diseases
such
 as diabetes or hypertension as compared to non-vegetarians because of the high nutritional value of a vegetarian
food
. To conclude, more and more people prefer to have a vegetarian
diet
 because it is low in price and it does not cause any harm to our body.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Vegetarian diet
  • Chronic diseases
  • Carbon footprint
  • Deforestation
  • Animal welfare
  • Nutritional deficiencies
  • Balanced intake
  • Societal norms
  • Meat-dominant
  • Sustainable living
  • Plant-based proteins
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