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Around the world, it is likely that more adults will work from home and more children will study from home as computer technology becomes cheaper and accessible. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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It is true that due to the affordability and accessibility of computers now, working and studying from home is now within people's reach. In my own perspective, I believe that
this
 tendency can only give a negative impact. One issue to consider is that working at their own residence causes less productivity. While computers can bring convenience to employees, it can
also
 result for more unfinished tasks.
For instance
, since a person is away from competitive environment
such
 as offices, there will be less pressure and motivation from his boss to finish the assignments. Another problem for workers is that it gives less interaction with people. Despite the benefits of saving time and money when the job is at within their house, it can only lead to deficiency of social skills. Rather than delivering a face to face communication with clients, employees are oftentimes alone and talk to clients only on computer screens.
Hence
,
this
 trend can bring negative impact to the employees. As for children studying at home,
this
 can
likewise
 give them disadvantages.
Firstly
, children are prone to distractions. They often failed to study because they lack focus on their lessons.
For example
, the usage of gadgets
such
 as a computer for studying can
also
 be utilized for gaming and browsing other off topic links.
Consequently
, their study is ineffective.
Moreover
, just like adults in the workforce, children may not be able to develop well their communication skills.
This
 is true since there is the absence of classroom environment wherein other students are present.
Thus
,
this
 is regarded as negative. In conclusion, even though there is an advantage seen in the convenience of people to work and be educated at home, I consider that
this
 can only bring about more problems for them in the future.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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