The charts below show the levels of participation in education and science in developing and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990

The charts below show the levels of participation in education and science in developing and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990
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The bar charts provide information about the average
years
that
people
spent in school, the
number
of
scientists
and
technicians
, and the
amount
of
money
spent on
research
and
development
in
both
developing and industrial
countries
in 1980 and 1990. The
amount
of
money
spent on
research
and
development
and the
number
of
scientists
and
technicians
were greater in the industrialized
countries
than
developing
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countries
in
both
1980 and 1990. The average
years
of schooling had increased from about 9 to 11
years
and from about 3 to just below 4
years
in 1980 and 1990 in
both
industrialized and
the
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developing
countries
respectively. The
number
of
scientists
and
technicians
had gone up in
both
developing and industrialized
countries
in 1990 than it was
in
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1980. It was around 10/1000
people
in 1980
then
raised to just below 20/1000
people
in 1990 for developing
countries
. In industrialized
countries
, it increased from just above 40/1000
people
to about 70/1000
people
.
In addition
, the
amount
of
money
spent on
research
and
development
had raised to almost 350 US billion dollars in industrialized
countries
in 1990 but decreased to nearly 20Us
billions
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billion
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in developing
countries
.
Overall
, the average
years
of schooling and
number
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the number
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of
scientists
and
technicians
had
been
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increased in developing and industrialized
countries
.
While
the
amount
of
money
spent on
research
and
development
had raised in industrialized
countries
but declined in developing
countries
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, people, number, scientists, technicians, amount, money, research, development, both, countries with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrollment rates
  • primary education
  • secondary education
  • tertiary education
  • literacy rates
  • scientific research
  • research and development (R&D)
  • correlation
  • gender disparities
  • participation
  • developing countries
  • industrialized countries
  • investment
  • comparison
  • impact
  • specified years
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