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Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment, but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next ten years? How can these problems be overcome?

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There are massive problems are going
to happened
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to happen
 in the
world countries
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world, countries
 during the coming several years.
Such
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 as, the increasing number of people and the quality of
education
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.
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 to these, there would be a great environmental
changes
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change
 on earth.
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, the
boost
the time that has elapsed
past
 number of population is considered as a major problem in Egypt. The more people are growing, the less quality of life will be.
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, the needed of water, food and shelter is an essential priority for each person. The government could not be able to cover all the needs, so that many families are in a
dangerous
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danger
 of dying.
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, the much more critical trouble is efficiency of schools and
universities
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university
education
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. There is a great gap between the local and the international curriculums because of the weakness of the teacher’s qualifications and non care with the researches. An American research was published three months ago said that Egypt recently has the forty eighth rank in the quality of the university
education
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.
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, in fact, my country is trying hard to work on these problems and find solutions to solve the nonstop increasing population. It is working on spreading knowledge and information that citizens are needed to know about the negative impacts, which are affecting our primary needs.
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, there is a specific announcement and advertisements for birth control in all the TV channels
,
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,
 radios and newspapers. On the hand, the government gives a major concern to deal with foreign countries to exchange
education
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 experts and scientists to improve and develop the teaching methodology and learning curriculums. To sum up, population and
education
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 problems and many others are in
a
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an
 important need from countries
should
disposed of to a purchaser
sold
 to control and solve
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • Ecosystem
  • Renewable resources
  • Urbanization
  • Demographics
  • Healthcare system
  • Pension crisis
  • Curriculum development
  • Digital literacy
  • E-learning platforms
  • Lifelong learning
  • Public policy
  • Biodiversity conservation
  • Green technology
  • Population density
  • Generational equity
  • Economic disparity
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