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Some young people are leaving the countryside to live in cities and towns, leaving only old people in the countryside. What problems are caused by this issue? What can be done to solve this situation?

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As you are the listed contact of customer service for Homegrown Fabrics, I write to you regarding an incomplete delivery of order number Z111-563-90.
Last
friday
the sixth day of the week; the fifth working day
Friday
, I placed an order for a hand woven silk scarf and a silk tie through the website of your company. The order was delivered today, but to my surprise the box was missing the bow tie.
This
 item is of extreme emotional importance for me because
this
 combination box will my gift to my grandparents on their seventy fifth wedding anniversary, which is in four days from today. I will be hugely disappointed to not being able to give anything to my grandfather on
this
 occasion.
Therefore
, I request you to please look into
this
 matter with
utmost urgency
Suggestion
the utmost urgency
 and make arrangements for the missing item to be delivered within the
next
 three days. I will be grateful if you could
also
 send me an email with the details of the parcel and a tracking number for the courier company. I hope that you will treat my complaint on priority.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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