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The table below describes the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below describes the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table below shows the change in the figure of female and male
staffs
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staff
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 and their
work places
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workplaces
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 that took place in 2 countries in the UK from 1851 to 1901. In the first year of the period, the number of male
employees
were
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 much higher than their female co-workers. In 1861, there was a bit
difference
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, female accounted for more than half of total
employees
. From the following years to the end of the period, the male
staffs
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 had always more than female.
However
, in 1901, the proportion was nearly the same.
Factories
 in these two places
were
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dramatically increased through 50 years. There were 721
factories
 in 1881 reached a peak in
this
 period and more than triple compared to 1851. The figure remained stable at about 600
in
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 1891 to 1901. Despite
of
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the rise in the number of
factories
, total
employees
were
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decreased significantly. In the
last
 year, there were only 61.000 workers, much lower than
1851
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in 1851
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 with 477.100
employees
 Clearly, the table describes the
developed
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 of
England
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the England
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 and
Wales
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Wales's
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 industry through the number of
factories
 and staff. It
also
 illustrates
the
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gender equality in male and female
employees
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words employees, factories with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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