Many childhood diseases can now be prevented through the use of vaccines. Should parents be made by law to immunise their children against common diseases or should individuals have the right to choose not to immunise their children? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. You should write at least 250 words

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Looked at from a broad historical perspective, childhood diseases, nowadays, have been decreased to
great extenct thanks
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a great extent thanks
great extent thanks
to vaccines.
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some people argue that the process of vaccinating their children is to be optional, I am a staunch supporter of the idea that it must be compulsory.
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essay will shed light on the importance of forcing parents to immunize their children against
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threats. Children are the core of any nation and regarded as its real fortune.
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,
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keeping and bringing up them in good health are
mandatoty
required by rule
mandatory
and to be accomplished through the cooperation between both
governmnets
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
and individuals.
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, letting
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crirtical
marked by a tendency to find and call attention to errors and flaws
critical
decision of the children
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vaccinated
up to their parents completely can form
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a great danger
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to
the society.To clarify, children
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if infected by
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diseases,
can not
can not
cannot
be relied on in the future for the prosperity of their
counteries
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
counters
counties
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, it will cost the
countries tremendous
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countries, tremendous
budgets in order to make them sound again. So, prevention is better than cure.
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, not only do the
govermnments
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
have to provide the suitable vaccines against common epidemics, but they are
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requested to make it obligatory and for free for all the children.
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can be accomplished through imposing strict laws.
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to that
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it is beneficial to provide the comprehensive medical centres providing immunising for
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children and assign subsidies for those of
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the children
. People haven't got the rights not to vaccinate their children.
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is not an option,
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is a must. Because it is inhumane for both children and parents who might become the victim of deadly diseases. To sum up, parents must be responsible for their children and they mustn't choose to immunise or not immunise, that should be a must for parents.

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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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