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Smacking children is the best form of discipline. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#children #form #discipline
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Nowadays, most parents are disciplining their children through physical
punishment
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. Some people believe that the effective
way
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 to
discipline
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 their children is by smacking them.
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 essay will argue that physical
punishment
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such
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 as smacking is not the best
way
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 to guide children. Parents believe that by punishing their children physically would give them the best form of
discipline
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. Perhaps, they are strongly convinced that by
way
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 of physical disciplining, their children will have fear
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of
 repeating
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 bad
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 and would learn from it.
For instance
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, a parent slaps the back of the hand of the
child
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, for a reason that the
child
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 thrown a glass of milk and broke. For these reasons, parents considered physical
punishment
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 as the most effective
way
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 to
discipline
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 their
child
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.
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, despite most parents consider physical
punishment
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 as a form of
discipline
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, it has bad effects for children too. Some parents smack their
child
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, out of sheer frustration and anger. There are other positive parenting techniques they can use
instead
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. Children can sense fear, and
discipline
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 can be
reinforce
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reinforced
 by words and there is no need for
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 pain to be inflicted. In fact, some of the countries banned the parents to do physical punishments and there are laws that were implemented. In conclusion,
this
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 essay argued that parents who punished their
child
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 physically is not an acceptable
way
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 to
discipline
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 them. In my opinion, I strongly believe that children can be
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discipline
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disciplined
 through reinforcing words without
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 inflicting pain as a
punishment
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.
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