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Smacking children is the best form of discipline. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, most parents are disciplining their children through physical
punishment
. Some people believe that the effective
way
 to
discipline
 their children is by smacking them.
This
 essay will argue that physical
punishment
such
 as smacking is not the best
way
 to guide children. Parents believe that by punishing their children physically would give them the best form of
discipline
. Perhaps, they are strongly convinced that by
way
 of physical disciplining, their children will have fear
on
Suggestion
of
 repeating
such
 bad
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 and would learn from it.
For instance
, a parent slaps the back of the hand of the
child
, for a reason that the
child
 thrown a glass of milk and broke. For these reasons, parents considered physical
punishment
 as the most effective
way
 to
discipline
 their
child
.
However
, despite most parents consider physical
punishment
 as a form of
discipline
, it has bad effects for children too. Some parents smack their
child
, out of sheer frustration and anger. There are other positive parenting techniques they can use
instead
. Children can sense fear, and
discipline
 can be
reinforce
Suggestion
reinforced
 by words and there is no need for
further
 pain to be inflicted. In fact, some of the countries banned the parents to do physical punishments and there are laws that were implemented. In conclusion,
this
 essay argued that parents who punished their
child
 physically is not an acceptable
way
 to
discipline
 them. In my opinion, I strongly believe that children can be
discipline
Suggestion
disciplined
 through reinforcing words without
further
 inflicting pain as a
punishment
.
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