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An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for individual and companies to shopping online?

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For some people, shopping is a crucial need,
therefore
, the method of shopping
also
 counts, in
this
 essay we're going to discuss one of these ways of purchase, which is online shopping, as well as getting a brief for its benefits and flaws. Why take a journey
instead
 of clicking a button?
nowadays
Suggestion
Nowadays
 the online shopping has saved both time and effort in
order
 to buy something, by placing your
order
, making the payment and writing your address, everything can be done by using your computer while you're at home wearing your pajamas
..
Accept space
..
why
Suggestion
Why
 bother going to the store, if the store can exist on your home computer screen. It's often said that easy come, easy go,
in other words
, can you guarantee that whatsoever
order
 was placed will match your expectations?! The answer to
that is
 obvious, it's impossible,
moreover
, there's a possibility that any sort of mistake can occur in the middle of the process, whether it's related to the size or the colour or even the selection of goods itself, that's why there's a flaw in buying something you didn't actually touch it. In conclusion, I'm personally convinced that as well as there's an ease in online shopping, there's a disadvantage as well, from one hand, you can place an
order
 with no efforts, from the other hand there's no control of the outcome of
this
 process.

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