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Some people believe that the increasing number of vehicles is one of the biggest problem facing cities, while others believe that cities have bigger challenges. Discuss both views and state your opinion

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In the recent times there are various global concerns across the world.
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, some people believe the increase in the number of vehicles is the most major concern in comparison with various other problems
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 as globalisation, health problems,
population
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 etc. In my essay, I will share both views.
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, one of the main reasons which has lead to an increase in the vehicles on the road, is due to the rise in the
population
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. As the
population
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 in the city is growing number of vehicles is increasing. The vehicles emit a lot of smoke in the air, which leads in causing various health problems among the people.
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, the
population
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 is a major concern. One of the more serious concerns is global warming with is affecting the world to a greater extend. The main causes of global warming are not only the
population
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 caused by vehicles, but
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 the emission of poisonous and harmful gases from factories.
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, we keep cutting trees in order to build more houses and offices, with
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 help in absorbing the carbon dioxide released. In my view, it is important that we reduce the use of the vehicle on the roads, but
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 work towards reducing the effect of the global warming. Small measures
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 as planting a tree or sharing a vehicle to work can help in reducing the effect and help build a better place to live in.The government in the recent times has
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 started taking measures to reduce the same. In conclusion, though, I agree that the increase in the number of vehicles is a concern.
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, there are more major concerns that need to be resolved.
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