The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting
The paragraph illustrates how much information from the
tourist
office
was sent to tourism through three different methods from
January
2011 to June 2011. In
January
, below 800 inquiries were transferred to the
tourist
office
by telephone, leading to a slight decrease until May when it
leveled
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out, at about 400 telephones. The
number
of tourists visiting the
office
directly started off with
lowest
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the lowest
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in
January
.
However
, in April, it increased considerably
overtook
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and overtook
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the
number
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letter
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letters
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/mail and
a
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apply
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telephone sent to the
office
. The total
number
of letters/
mails
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emails
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received was roughly 900 in
January
, which fluctuated between
January
and March before rising gradually to nearly 1600 in June 2011.
While
,
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there was a significant climb in the
amount
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number
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of
travelers
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travellers
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came
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who came
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to
Tourist
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the Tourist
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office
from over 400 persons in
January
2011 to approximately 1900 persons
at the end
of
period
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the period
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.
Overall
,
it is clear that
between
January
2011 and June 2011, the
number
of tourists and people
called
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who called
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up
Tourist
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the Tourist
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information
office
grew up dramatically over the period,
while
the figure for travellers
got
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who got
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information via mail/letter declined steadily. There is a common
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tourist, office, january, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • enquiries
  • Tourist Information Office
  • in person
  • by letter/email
  • by telephone
  • general trend
  • six-month period
  • significant increase
  • steady rise
  • decline
  • peak
  • fluctuations
  • monthly data
  • comparison
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