The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting
The paragraph illustrates how much information from the
tourist
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office
was sent to tourism through three different methods from Use synonyms
January
2011 to June 2011.
In Use synonyms
January
, below 800 inquiries were transferred to the Use synonyms
tourist
Use synonyms
office
by telephone, leading to a slight decrease until May when it Use synonyms
leveled
out, at about 400 telephones. The Change the spelling
levelled
number
of tourists visiting the Use synonyms
office
directly started off with Use synonyms
lowest
in Correct article usage
the lowest
January
. Use synonyms
However
, in April, it increased considerably Linking Words
overtook
the Correct word choice
and overtook
number
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Change preposition
of letter
letter
/mail and Fix the agreement mistake
letters
a
telephone sent to the Correct article usage
apply
office
.
The total Use synonyms
number
of letters/Use synonyms
mails
received was roughly 900 in Correct your spelling
emails
January
, which fluctuated between Use synonyms
January
and March before rising gradually to nearly 1600 in June 2011. Use synonyms
While
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,
there was a significant climb in the Remove the comma
apply
amount
of Change the quantifier
number
travelers
Change the spelling
travellers
came
to Correct pronoun usage
who came
Use synonyms
Tourist
Correct article usage
the Tourist
office
from over 400 persons in Use synonyms
January
2011 to approximately 1900 persons Use synonyms
at the end
of Linking Words
period
.
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the period
Overall
, Linking Words
it is clear that
between Linking Words
January
2011 and June 2011, the Use synonyms
number
of tourists and people Use synonyms
called
up Correct pronoun usage
who called
Use synonyms
Tourist
information Correct article usage
the Tourist
office
grew up dramatically over the period, Use synonyms
while
the figure for travellers Linking Words
got
information via mail/letter declined steadily.
There is a commonCorrect pronoun usage
who got
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourist, office, january, number with synonyms.
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