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Some people think that newspaper are best media to learn and get information from, while others believe that internet is a better source.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #newspaper #media #information #internet #source
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In today's world,
people
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 can have access to
information
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 from different
sources
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such
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 as
newspapers
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 and the
Internet
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.
Newspapers
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 give
people
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 the possibility to learn by reading articles about a topic, but the
Internet
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 has more
information
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 and
resources
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 to learn. From my point of view, the
Internet
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 is a better source to learn, because it has more
information
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 and media accessible to everyone. On one hand, many
people
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 prefer to inform themselves using
newspapers
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, because they can find the data they need, and they trust the authors of
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information
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.
Therefore
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,
newspapers
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 could give more veracity to the
information
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 and avoid misinformation. Even so, the amount of data accessible from
newspapers
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 is lower than on the
Internet
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. On the
Internet
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, there is more
information
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 accessible from different devices like laptops and cell phones. So, if a person wants to learn using the
Internet
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, they can get
information
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 from different
sources
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 and points of view on the same topic, and it could
also
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 be in
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, which is not possible with
newspapers
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. In my opinion, the
Internet
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 is a better source than
newspapers
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 to learn and get
information
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 because
people
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 can learn with different
resources
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such
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 as videos, scientific articles, podcasts, and series.
While
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, with
newspapers
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,
people
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 only have the possibility to read, and if they have any doubts, they cannot search for more
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. In conclusion,
people
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 have the possibility to learn with
newspapers
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 or the
Internet
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, because they are
sources
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 where
information
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 about different topics is available. Even though, I think
people
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 should opt to learn with the
Internet
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,
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 because they can find more
resources
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 to learn.
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, there are many high-quality
resources
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, which are free, and are made by trustworthy
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task achievement
Try to elaborate on each main point with more specific examples or evidence to strengthen your arguments. For example, instead of just stating that newspapers offer more reliable information, provide examples of topics where newspapers excel in reliability.
coherence cohesion
While your essay is well-structured, further integration of examples throughout the text will enhance the cohesion. Consider using linking words and phrases to better connect ideas within paragraphs, which will improve the overall flow.
task achievement
The introduction is clear and presents a balanced view of the issue, with a clear opinion stated.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph has a clear purpose, aiding clarity and overall cohesion.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes the key points and restates your opinion, making the essay feel complete.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reliable sources
  • fact-checking
  • curated content
  • editorial process
  • delayed reporting
  • constraints
  • real-time updates
  • perspectives
  • information overload
  • editorial oversight
  • misinformation
  • critical evaluation
  • navigating
  • immediacy
  • breadth
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