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Companies should provide sports and social facilities for local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#companies #sports #facilities #communities
IT IS OF GRAVE URGENCY THAT THE GOVERNMENT IMPOSE A HIGHER TAX ON FAST FOODS BECAUSE IT HAS CAUSED AN UPSURGE IN THE AILMENT AND MORTALITY RATE DUE TO HIGH CONSUMPTION OF IT IN SOME COUNTRIES. SICKNESSES LIKE DIABETES TYPE 1 AND 2 AND MYELITIS, IS
AS A RESULT
 OF EATING TOO MUCH UNPROCESSED SUGAR OR SWEETENERS,
THIS
 ARE VERY COMMON ILLNESSES OCCURING BETWEEN THE AGES OF 30-50, IN THE PAST DECADES THERE HAS BEEN A UPROAR IN THE PREVALANCE OF
THIS
 TYPE OF DISEASES AND THE HEALTH PROFESSIONALS HAS PROVEN IT IS INDEED DUE TO THE INCREASE IN INTAKE OF
THIS
 FOODS. OTHER MEDICAL DIAGNOSIS LIKE FOOD POISONING, DIARHOEA
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CONSTIPATION HAS BEEN NOTABLY PREVALENT IN RELATION TO CANNED FOODS
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SARDINES WHICH CONTAINS A CHEMICAL CALLED MERCURY WHICH AIDS IN DEBILITATION AND CAUSES UNTREATABLE MIGRAINES. FUTHERMORE, FROZEN FOODS LIKE SOUPS, DIARIES, VEGETABLES WHICH HAS BEEN SUSPECTED TO BE AN UNDERLYING CAUSE OF CANCER,
ALTHOUGH
, NOT YET PROVEN, BUT REKNOWNED RESEARCHERS HAVE BEEN TRYING TO FIND THE CONNECTION BETWEEN
THIS
 TWO. IN CONCLUSION EATING INORGANIC UNPROCESSED, NON FAST FOOD CAN AID ANTIOXIDATION, SLOW DOWN AGING, KEEPING THE SKIN PLUMP AND FIRM
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REVITALIZATION AND REJUVENATION, WITH
THIS
 FEW POINTS OF MINE I HOPE I HAVE BEEN ABLE TO CONVINCE YOU AND NOT CONFUSE YOU.THANK YOU
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