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Companies should provide sports and social facilities for local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#companies #sports #facilities #communities
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IT IS OF GRAVE URGENCY THAT THE GOVERNMENT IMPOSE A HIGHER TAX ON FAST FOODS BECAUSE IT HAS CAUSED AN UPSURGE IN THE AILMENT AND MORTALITY RATE DUE TO HIGH CONSUMPTION OF IT IN SOME COUNTRIES. SICKNESSES LIKE DIABETES TYPE 1 AND 2 AND MYELITIS, IS
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 OF EATING TOO MUCH UNPROCESSED SUGAR OR SWEETENERS,
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 ARE VERY COMMON ILLNESSES OCCURING BETWEEN THE AGES OF 30-50, IN THE PAST DECADES THERE HAS BEEN A UPROAR IN THE PREVALANCE OF
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 TYPE OF DISEASES AND THE HEALTH PROFESSIONALS HAS PROVEN IT IS INDEED DUE TO THE INCREASE IN INTAKE OF
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 FOODS. OTHER MEDICAL DIAGNOSIS LIKE FOOD POISONING, DIARHOEA
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CONSTIPATION HAS BEEN NOTABLY PREVALENT IN RELATION TO CANNED FOODS
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SARDINES WHICH CONTAINS A CHEMICAL CALLED MERCURY WHICH AIDS IN DEBILITATION AND CAUSES UNTREATABLE MIGRAINES. FUTHERMORE, FROZEN FOODS LIKE SOUPS, DIARIES, VEGETABLES WHICH HAS BEEN SUSPECTED TO BE AN UNDERLYING CAUSE OF CANCER,
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, NOT YET PROVEN, BUT REKNOWNED RESEARCHERS HAVE BEEN TRYING TO FIND THE CONNECTION BETWEEN
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 TWO. IN CONCLUSION EATING INORGANIC UNPROCESSED, NON FAST FOOD CAN AID ANTIOXIDATION, SLOW DOWN AGING, KEEPING THE SKIN PLUMP AND FIRM
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REVITALIZATION AND REJUVENATION, WITH
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 FEW POINTS OF MINE I HOPE I HAVE BEEN ABLE TO CONVINCE YOU AND NOT CONFUSE YOU.THANK YOU
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