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Motorways help people travel quickly and cover long distances but they also cause problems. What are the problems of motorways and what solutions are there?

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Highways have changed our driving experience completely. These roads diminished the time it required us to reach from
one
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 location to the other, provided a safe driving
environment
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 which reduced the incidence of accidents, and
also
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 reduced the amount of traffic in major cities. Despite these major advantages, motorways have
also
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 created several unwanted effects which cause major consequences on our surroundings. Despite their
convinience
the state of being suitable or opportune
convenience
, highways have a major
effect
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 on our
environment
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 as it
devides
separate into parts or portions
divides
decides
 the natural ecological system and prevents the free movement of animals from
one
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side
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 to the other. As these roads are very long, animals,
such
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 as wolves and
dears
massive plantigrade carnivorous or omnivorous mammals with long shaggy coats and strong claws
bears
, are trapped between the roads and can not cross them naturally. As a consequence, the
natual
in accordance with nature; relating to or concerning nature
natural
 habitat of these
animal
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animals
 is
substantally
to a great extent or degree
substantially
dimished
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, affecting their ability to feed and raise their
offsprings
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offspring
. The
effect
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 of roads on the natural breeding pattern of dears have been
extensivly
in a widespread way
extensively
 studied in California, and a recent research by California
Univesrity
the body of faculty and students at a university
University
have showed
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have shown
 a 15% decrease in the population of dears,
as a result
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 of
increased amount
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the increased amount
 of roads paved in their habitat.
Depite
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Despite
 that, there are ways through which we can overcome the negative
effect
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 of motorways on our
environment
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. Highways can be
build
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built
 in a way which allow animals to cross freely from
one
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side
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 to the other,
thus
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 maintaining their ecological system untouched. To illustrate, bridges and
tunnles
move through by or as by digging
tunnels
, can be made so that animals could cross freely from
one
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side
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 to the other.
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, walls
can be build
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can be built
along
side by side
alongside
side
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 the motorways so that
wild life
all living things (except people) that are undomesticated
wildlife
 will not be able to cross it. These ecological solutions have been
attepmted
tried unsuccessfully
attempted
 successfully in Israel in the
last
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 decade, and recent data have shown that there is no change in the natural habitat of
wild life
all living things (except people) that are undomesticated
wildlife
, despite a 10% increase in the amount of highways. To conclude,
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 motorways have made our lives
convinient
suited to your comfort or purpose or needs
convenient
 and easy, it has a profound
effect
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 on our surroundings. By building roads which allow the free movement of
animal
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animals
an animal
 from
one
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side
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 to the other we can still enjoy a secure driving experience, as well as an amazing
environment
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.
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