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University students are increasingly studying abroad as part of their studies. Do the advantages of studying abroad outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, numerous international students fraternise at local campuses. While, some students are content studying in their own country, many others choose to study abroad. About
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 essay will discuss why many students follow their dreams on home soil, but why many view it benefits to study overseas for future careers. On the one hand, the main advantages is that students of studying overseas will get extremely experience challenges of foreign culture, international languages and people come from around the world, etc.
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 many students may learn another style of living with others who have their own way to leading independently live. For examples
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 studying overseas students has proven to create well balanced graduates and pretty sure have a significant opportunity work provided by state government. Of course the benefits of studying cannot be denied. On the others hand
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that studying abroad have some reason negative impacts like currency exchange rates, accommodation and plane ticket etc. Especially many
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 will get homesick for their family and friends on their home town. Certainly, they are might be
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environment and international language of the new country.
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a foreign language
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