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Some people believe that air travel should be restricted because it causes serious pollution and uses up the worlds fuel resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Recently, travelling by flight Is not preferred by some individuals due to
air
 contamination and exhaustion of the universe fuel resources
.
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.
Therefore they
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Therefore, they
 think travelling by
air
 should be minimized while others believe
otherwise
.In my opinion, commuters should be encouraged to travel by
air
 while moving from one place to the other, to reduce tiredness of the
body
 and less accidents
,
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,
 which is experienced while travelling by road.
Firstly
, embarking on a journey by using an aeroplane should be greatly encouraged to avoid, the
travelers
a person who changes location
travellers
 from getting tired which can demoralize their
body
 system entirely. Thereby, making the individual uncomfortable while embarking on the trip. During one of my Punch newspaper review dated the 8th of July 2019, an article revealed that 97% of people who use flights to travel rarely experience
body
 weakness. Another point to consider, is that less accidents occur if the use of
airplanes
 are encouraged for commuters.Travelling by
air
 erases the notion of passing or driving through bad roads which is encountered by road users. A set of
students
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student
 researchers discovered that societies where
air
 commuting is imposed, accidents are reduced to 5% or nothing. In conclusion, curbing the
usage
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use
 of
aero planes
an aircraft that has a fixed wing and is powered by propellers or jets
aeroplanes
 to travel is preferred by some while others think the opposite. I strongly believe that the use of
air
 planes should be emphasized on and imposed greatly to avoid accidents and
body
 weakness.
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