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Family who sent their children to private school should not be require to pay taxes that support the state education system

#children #school #taxes #support #education #system
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Private
school
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 is more favourable than
state
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school
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on
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in
with
 the belief of its better
education
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 and superior
school
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 faculty resources. It is arguably that families whose children are educated in private schools should be exempted from some portions of
tax
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 that are applied to support the public
school
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system
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. While for my personal
opinion I
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opinion, I
 disagree with
this
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 argument.
Firstly
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,
tax
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-free for families who put their pupils into private schools seems unrealistic considering the complexity of calculation of
tax
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.
This
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 calculation
issue not
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issue, not
 only comes from the
government
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side but
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side, but
also
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 from the
residents
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residents'
 side which means it will be a bureaucratic process for
government
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 to determine the statistic that are spent on
state
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school
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system
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 and the
tax
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 threshold for citizens earning different income categories will be too complicated to reconsider.
Secondly
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, it is an obligation
for
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of
 all citizens to pay
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tax
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taxes
to
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for
 funding public services no matter if they are
benefit
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benefiting
 from the services or not.
For instance
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,
government
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 spends
large amount
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a large amount
large amounts
 of money funded by
tax
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 on infrastructure construction and maintenance
such
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 as on public parks, roads and entertainment facilities. People cannot refuse
paying
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to pay
tax
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 just because they are not taking
advantages
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advantage
 on these services.
Similarly
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,
state
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school
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system
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 plays a vital role
on
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in
 children's
education
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. Every citizen is obliged to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 his/her duty by paying the
tax
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. In conclusion, both families who send their children to private schools and public schools should equally share the responsibility of supporting the
state
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education
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system
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. It is hopeful that with the effort of
government
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 and residents,
state
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education
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system
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 could be improved into
more sophisticated stage
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the more sophisticated stage
a more sophisticated stage
.
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