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Houses are essential for people. Some argue that governments should offer free houses for people who can not afford to pay for it. Do you agree or disagree with the statement.

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Food
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clothing and shelter are three basic necessities for a human being.Some people
believes
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believe
 that authorities should provide free homes for poor people while others differ.
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 essay will discuss both sides of
argument
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the argument
an argument
arguments
 and provide evidence as to how
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 is
government’s reponsibility
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the government’s responsibility
government’s responsibility
. One’s own Adobe is not only a
dream but
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dream, but
 is crucial for leading a healthy and comfortable life
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on the
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contrary it
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contrary, it
 is a fact that everyone can not afford to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
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 wish because of sky- rocketing poverty values and low income levels. To illustrate
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a daily wager can never think of purchasing even a small single bed- room flat in metro cities of India. To resolve
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comes the government role of building cost free houses for and
alloting
make it possible through a specific action or lack of action for something to happen
allowing
allotting
 them on the basis of their income levels.
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 in turn will lead to reduction in spreading of diseases like malaria
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 cholera which are caused majorly due to poor living condition and
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 will save a lot of government exchequer on non- productive activities, that they can spend on improvement of living standard of
unprivileged
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 population.
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 to
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, it will make country clean and a better place to live.
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it will improve
standard
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the standard
standards
 of living and level of education level among
unprivileged
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 lot.
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opposers
a person of authority who subjects others to undue pressures
oppressors
 of free home
argues
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argue
 that
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it will negatively impact country’s financial system and can lead to bankruptcy of already poor authorities and may result in complacency among people. In my opinion
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authorities are responsible for well being of an individual and allotment of free homes will surely
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serve
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 purpose and will improve
country
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the country
 as a whole not only socially but economically as
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.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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