Essay topics: Some people think that zoos are cruel and all the zoos should be closed. However,other people think that zoos are useful to protect the rare animals. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
The zoo is always attractive to the children, and families. And many people often visit
such
places on different occasions, but some people are not in favour of zoos
and it
should be dismissed, but comparatively other things Correct pronoun usage
they
that’
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that
it’s
very positive and helpful for some rare forest animal breeds. In this
essay
we will argue about both points of view, and to what extent we are agreeing or disagreeing and will share our opinion.
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essay,
Hence
, zoos
are very popular in public places, where we can visit on different occasions and sometimes in
our off days with our loved ones. Change preposition
on
Although
it’s
quite interesting
and attractive place for Correct article usage
an interesting
the
children, Correct article usage
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which
cannot be avoided. Meanwhile, if we talk about Correct pronoun usage
it
the
animal protection, somehow Correct article usage
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it’s
unfair to them,
because they are not born to lock in somewhere. But Remove the comma
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in other words
, it’s
very positive and helpful in other cases, such
as collecting the rare breeds from the forests or those living creatures
, whose life is on
threat from the other Change preposition
under
creatures
and hunters. Well, in the zoos
, most of them are certified zoo caretakers and handling
everything, systematically Wrong verb form
handle
in
a professional way.
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and in
Furthermore
, both groups have their own point of view, but being emotional isn’t always good. Especially, in zoos
they have a complete first aid facilities
for Correct the article-noun agreement
complete first aid facilities
a complete first aid facility
the
sick animals and professional veterinarians. Particularly, Correct article usage
apply
for
some special Change preposition
apply
creatures
, they
always care about Correct pronoun usage
apply
to provide
themChange the verb form
providing
a
natural environment for their health and long life. Add the preposition
with a
For example
, white
cheetah is Add an article
the white
a white
exceptional
breed, so in the wildlife Add an article
an exceptional
parks
they could provide maximum near the natural environment Add a comma
parks,
for
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them
.
In my opinion, maintaining a zooCorrect pronoun usage
apply
,
is always Remove the comma
apply
positive
and Correct article usage
a positive
supporting
act for wild animals and could help Replace the word
supportive
breeding
in the future. Change the verb form
to breed
To conclude
from this
, the concept of building safari parks,
isn’t particularly to have different Remove the comma
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creatures
under the
one roof. Correct article usage
apply
It’s
also
a
significant for the science and biology groups for future experiments and for the country to have a unique creature.Correct article usage
apply
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that your introduction clearly introduces the topic and presents the main points of your essay. Additionally, provide a strong conclusion that summarizes the key arguments and reiterates your opinion.
task achievement
Make sure to address all aspects of the essay question, discussing both views and giving your own opinion. Provide more comprehensive ideas and examples to support your arguments.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:
...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?
