Essay topics: Some people think that zoos are cruel and all the zoos should be closed. However,other people think that zoos are useful to protect the rare animals. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

The zoo is always attractive to the children, and families. And many people often visit
such
places on different occasions, but some people are not in favour of
zoos
and
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should be dismissed, but comparatively other things
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it’s
very positive and helpful for some rare forest animal breeds. In
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we will argue about both points of view, and to what extent we are agreeing or disagreeing and will share our opinion.
Hence
,
zoos
are very popular in public places, where we can visit on different occasions and sometimes
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our off days with our loved ones.
Although
it’s
quite
interesting
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and attractive place for
the
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children,
which
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cannot be avoided. Meanwhile, if we talk about
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animal protection, somehow
it’s
unfair to them
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because they are not born to lock in somewhere. But
in other words
,
it’s
very positive and helpful in other cases,
such
as collecting the rare breeds from the forests or those living
creatures
, whose life is
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threat from the other
creatures
and hunters. Well, in the
zoos
, most of them are certified zoo caretakers and
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everything, systematically
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a professional way.
Furthermore
, both groups have their own point of view, but being emotional isn’t always good. Especially, in
zoos
they have
a complete first aid facilities
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for
the
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sick animals and professional veterinarians. Particularly,
for
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some special
creatures
,
they
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always care about
to provide
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them
a
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natural environment for their health and long life.
For example
,
white
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cheetah is
exceptional
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breed, so in the wildlife
parks
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they could provide maximum near the natural environment
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them
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. In my opinion, maintaining a zoo
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is always
positive
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and
supporting
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act for wild animals and could help
breeding
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in the future.
To conclude
from
this
, the concept of building safari parks
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isn’t particularly to have different
creatures
under
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one roof.
It’s
also
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significant for the science and biology groups for future experiments and for the country to have a unique creature.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that your introduction clearly introduces the topic and presents the main points of your essay. Additionally, provide a strong conclusion that summarizes the key arguments and reiterates your opinion.
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Make sure to address all aspects of the essay question, discussing both views and giving your own opinion. Provide more comprehensive ideas and examples to support your arguments.

Your opinion

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