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Write about the following topic: In many countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places. It is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. Do you agree or disagree? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Smoking causes more harm than it benefits people. I agree with the view that it is illegal to
smoke
 in public areas and people who wish to
smoke
 should have to leave the building. People should enjoy public places with fresh
air
. Smoking causes unpleasant smell and pollutes the
air
. When many people
smoke
, the
air
 quality is much worse. I am a parent of a three
years
Suggestion
year
 old daughter, and I do not want her to have any problems with her health. If she is in the smoking environment, it can happen. Myself, I think smoking causes a lot of health problems.
For example
, lung cancer, breathing problems. Many people from my country have lung cancer, and I think it is because of smoking and being in a smoking environment. I tried to be away from people who smokes. And I am really happy when I came to Canada because I learned that people need to leave the building when they are smoking. I am not as worried as before for getting lung cancer from smoking environment. In my country, many people
smoke
 in restaurants, on the street, in houses. When people talk, they
smoke
 a lot. With small places, one person smokes can cause the
air
 to be much worse. I
can not
can not
cannot
 stay for long and talk to people because I can not breath. I love speaking to people and I wish to stay longer. My friends do the same thing. I think it is fair that the person who wants to
smoke
 should leave for
few minutes
Suggestion
a few minutes
. The
air
 could be much cleaner. I do not like smoking at all. I love fresh
air
, and I want my children to enjoy it in public places. Because of that, I wish all countries ban smoking in the public areas.

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