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As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#money #businesses #responsibilities
Nowadays, cooperate
industries social
Accept comma addition
industries, social
 obligations has increased due to an increase in the competition in the market. In my viewpoint, companies should contribute to the social cause of the community.
However
, there are several reasons why
primary industry objective
Suggestion
the primary industry objective
 is to earn a profit. The companies have few costs to be covered before they may share revenue in the community. These expenses, including staff salaries, operating cost, transportation expenses, etc.
Furthermore
, companies do advertisement for the promotion of the product, without marketing, companies would not be able to sell products, but marketing expenses are quite high.
Consequently
, if their business would run smoothly, the companies would be able to distribute money out of revenue to the social cause of the nation.
On the other hand
, industries should take social responsibility seriously. Companies can contribute to society through taxes as the government use taxes for the development of infrastructure, health
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
, and education system, etc.
Moreover
, companies can support nonprofit organizations and help them to collect money from the public.
For example
: in Canada, big companies
such
 as Walmart collect donations for the sick
kid's
Suggestion
kids'
 foundation as well as CIBC collect donation for a cancer charity. These companies are well trusted by customers as they earned a lot of loyal clients, which help them to grow their business in the country, and even it boosts their reputation in society. If the companies stand for the social cause, they could receive tax deductions from the government, which can help them in profit-making. In conclusion, industries are facing fierce competition for survival in the economy, but they should take their social responsibilities, which can be proved beneficial for them.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social responsibilities
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Ethical behavior
  • Societal impact
  • Stakeholders
  • Profit-driven
  • Public perception
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Community development
  • Human rights
  • Workplace safety
  • Altruism
  • Balanced approach
  • Accountability
  • Consumer loyalty
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